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Interesting concept. You lost me a little bit as you went on just because, being a rather non-emotional person, it seemed sappy to me. That's a minimal critique, though, because ...

Hey! Looks like all the grammar nitpicks have already passed through so I'll skip my usual thorough examination. This was really cute! How did you come up with the concept? ...

This was a little unexpected. When I clicked on it, I didn't know what to expect and I certainly was surprised. It's great, but to me, you're walking the fine ...

I didn't find any outstanding grammatical errors, which I'm usually apt to spot, but I felt like this was trying to be mysterious, but was a little overt. It needs ...

This was a little strange because I didn't understand the context nor the ending. If there is more to this story posted, you should let people know and maybe that ...

This was interesting. I can't say that I understand the premise, but I see what you're getting at. I think you could even elaborate if you wanted to and create ...

It was nothing more than a cruel recapitulation. So he surrendered easily, like the flowers forfeiting at the first breath of death. How is leaving flowers that die a cruel ...

A little creepy, but great work. I'll admit that I'm a little weirded out by the exaggerated imagery and the talking ant. You have an interesting way of revealing backstory ...

Consequently, if he did fight Daniel, was his reputation worth sacrificing his perfect record? I'm not sure that "consequently" is the word you want to use here. The second part's ...

Thanks you guys. It means a lot to hear feedback, and I'm so glad you like it.

This was really good! Just one nitpick. What if, you thout Change it to "thought". I think it's just a typo. I really like the kind of twisted plot and ...

Hey guys, I haven't really posted anything in a while, but bear with me here. Audrey could hear the steady beep of the heart rate monitor. The drip of the ...

Not a word was breathed I have my doubts about this, but that's entirely your artistic choice. It just seemed a little odd to me. But if you their sold ...

By simply being here, all of them had broken the law This is a little awkward to me. Maybe say, "by simply being here, a law had been broken." I ...

Confused? Check for part 1 in Other Fiction. Enjoy. Now, you might be wondering what the hell, no pun intended, the Devil, Master of Darkness, is doing in high school. ...